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I haven't actually interacted with York yet, but I do like stalking your posts. You're pretty clear and concise and it's really easy to tell when York is talking to Zach, et cetera.
I'm sorry I'm not more helpful, but I have the fault of being canon blind to...a heck of a lot of things. orz
Rainbow Dash (AU) Overlord Zetta Zecora Morgan Knight
Concern: As much as Zecora not frequently poking her head in is canon, does it feel adequate for the game? I can come up with reasons to push her into greater action and presence if it feels like I'm being inactive with her.
I think it's spot on. Zecora having less of a presence and showing up when the plot demands it is a perfect methodology for her actions. And I'd imagine it's tough to keep rhyming for very long.
I love Mae. A lot. You know this. I do sometimes have to look up (or ask) what terms mean, but ya know what? That's not a bad thing. It feels like reading an old fantasy novel, and I *like* that.
If I have one concern about Lucifer, it's that I don't have a sense of what he's doing. At the moment, he seems to just be lurking around, occasionally showing up to make philosophical statements, but it feels like he ought to be up to something more than that?
You have a really bad poker face. Like. reeeeeeally bad. It's almost like I don't need to hide anything about Honeycomb because you're so eager to reveal it yourself. This might just be because of how much I read your plurks, or because I already know, but it's still... pretty noticable!
Concerns: My tagging speed hasn't gotten much better Especially since a lot of my focus went to getting Maytwi through the shadow event and some characters have gotten more exposure than others Maytwi > everyone else. I'd definitely appreciate advice on how to fix these and apologize that they're a thing in the first place. Crit about anything else is also openly accepted!
I think May!Twi needed the most attention, so it's understandable. Dante is a treat to see as always. Can't really comment on Kreutzer.
I would like to see Queen Chrysalis around more, though I do apologize for not being able to come up with some plot between Tails and Chrissy. Most of the ideas I had were pretty much shot down, but I am trying to think up better ideas that won't cause trouble with the mods.
The only only only thing that bugs me are little tiny grammar/spelling things I catch from time to time, but other than that, I think your muses are just fine. Especially the Flutters.
Can't say much about Hiro because I don't know his canon all that much, but he doesn't seem too flat.
Okay no. Even though my feeling towards robots has been... less than amicable, not gonna sugarcoat it, I do like Kittencee, if only for the fact that she's reacting realistically to "holy shit new body suddenly organic why is everybody bigger than me".
Only pony-Anthony I've got - and blassst, I know I've not exactly been about thus far! But of course, if anyone's got anything to say for where I have been, I'll be delighted to hear it~
needs more fire. also when are you going to bring in pony harvents
He's a little shit, yeah, but he's the perfect little shit. From what I've seen of the show (which isn't much to be honest), your voice is damn near spot on, the perfect blend of rage, ire, and unabashed hatred of everything that isn't himself (or Shakespeare).
I just want to know how he'd react to the FBI presence in Ponyville. Or if he knows at all.
Well, I only have Bread Clowns, so... hit me, I guess.
Concrit is always accepted. I'm still fairly convinced I'm a terrible roleplayer, especially in regards to developing C.R., which is something I've never thought much about before. Any tips, any notes on ways Pierrot can capitalize on CR opportunities would be very welcome.
I love hearing your thoughts as always, and I'm sorry I'm not experienced enough yet to knowledgeably concrit on other people's roleplaying. ;__;
I think the only thing here would be tagging speed and consistency. Maybe Pierrot should do a reintroduction to get to know all of the new arrivals, because that's a pretty good way to build CR. If nobody knows who he is except for word of mouth and isolated incidents (ahem, skinsuit debacle), then it's hard to build relationships.
Just the Nephernee right now, though hopefully she shall be supplemented soon.
Concern: I know I'm not the fastest tagger, and I do apologize for that. Despite the meds, I do still have problems with the brain Fog and occasionally seizures, but hopefully the new meds will be helping with that. I am also aware I sometimes have weird grammar things/typos and my tag quality probably isn't very consistent...trying to get better, though!
Characterwise, I try to keep a good balance between readability and her voice/personality, though I will very much admit the Shadow event changed a lot. So, please do let me know if there's anything you'd like to see?
Please be gentle, though (skittish is me). I prefer non-anon.
Speaking as a canon-familiar person, I think you're doing really well with her personality. She's definitely the Nephenee I loved from the games, just gone through a couple events that have affected her realistically. (And, you know, a pony now.)
Voice-wise, rendering her accent that way is a personal choice, and I might not have chosen it myself, but I think you do it well.
Basically what I'm trying to say is that your Nephenee is very close to canon, and I enjoy seeing her around the game.
Concerns: My big concern, out of everything is how my Derpy. I know a lot of people have a lot of Headcanon-y things about her and I really don't follow it, so I'm wondering how it is
I think Derpy is fine in my opinion. Since she's a background Pony, you have your own interpretation of her, and it's not necessarily going to line up with anything else. And she's not coming off as dumb or anything, just an average every day pony.
the latter two are where I feel I need the most aid. Jack is hard to get out and about since his marefriend is so loveably distracting, and 90s Kid is just exhausting.
I know I haven't been around much, but now that I've quit my job maybe after recovering from surgery I'll be back and more active.
Surgery is a bugger to recover from, so take your time. That being said, I like your voice for Jack. I was a big BTN player in the day and I loves me some Farmer Jack. I haven't been into AT4W as hard as I should have been but I think they're spot on.
I can think of nothing. I love how the descriptions you use fit the characters (Bertie's is super British and fancy, what?), and they're both fun to read and play off of.
Flare Star Vatan Haini/Hain Princess Luna (Kon Ran CRAU)
I know most of my cast is OCs and one is a game-AU, so it's harder to get actual constructive criticism. On the other hand, the two questions I have are ones that are unrelated to how close I am to any canon:
Have I been consistent in my character voice, and how am I OOCly?
The second one is particularly of interest to me, because I'm forever afraid of people not telling me I'm being a jerk to my face, and for that matter, I'm worried I've been too pushy lately when it comes to description, possibly even bordering on godmodey. Have I?
If you don't want to talk to me about it here, I'm always available on Plurk at kataranisword, and typically on AIM as Bahamut725.
I think they've been consistent lately, and as far as Luna is concerned she IS a game import which means she has undergone a lot of previous development. Things are bound to be dictated by her previous experiences. So I think you're good.
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