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Both their journals also have HMDs which is anon-enabled, IP logging off and screened posts. Anon on here is also fine.
I've been aware that I have (or had) been too evil with my characters and I have been trying to be much nicer to them, but I can't tell if I've been done enough or not. If I'm still making the same mistakes, please let me know.
Have I been having Tails lose his temper too much? Not act mature enough? Has he been boring?
Coco I've been really struggling lately. I have been having a hard time making AC with her a lot and I honestly have no idea where to take her in development. Aside from disappeared marefriend, she's happy with her life for the most part and most of her issues have been resolved. And waiting for her next appearance in MLP would require dropping her for a few months. Do you guys have any advice on what I could do with her and improve?
I've mentioned your enthusiasm - or overenthusiasm - a few times in anonplurks, and am finally feeling comfortable enough to come out and out myself. At this point, fully honestly? I have no problems with your IC presence.
The problem is, even though you're doing a lot better when it comes to the RP itself, sometimes in OOC matters - such as on Plurk, most notably - you tend to come on... really strong. I don't know if it's a lack of contextual empathy or something like that, but you seem to find things that bug you and latch onto them like a hungry pit bull, regardless of how insignificant they are or how awkward the tone gets. I'm not sure how to fix this, or if you can spot it while it's transpiring, but it's my biggest issue.
Regarding Tails losing his temper: it's hard to say what's "right", there. He's an impulsive teenager whose canon counterpart is an impulsive supergenius kid. In addition, he has some really frustrating negative CR in his life, so it makes sense that he'd lash out regularly. If anything, I'd love to see more of Tails and Trixie, if for no other reason than I can see Tails being the sort of type who would "try to be the better pony" and try to make amends, only to have it blow up in his face again and again thanks to Trixie's ego.
Regarding Coco: Finding contentment is a weird place in a game like this, but at the same time, you can still find stuff, if you look. As an example, Flare is working to try to help others find the fulfillment she has, while at the same time fighting with the fact that she knows she's not supposed to be here, that going back home would basically be accepting that the "natural order" of things is for her to be unhappy. It's an interesting dynamic to explore, so it's not like there's nothing at all you could do WITH Coco. After all, she's in a world where her (not)parents begrudgingly accept her choices, she has her dream job, and she's got more agency than she even had in canon. She's a self-made business-mare, but maybe that feels a little hollow since it's not "home".
I'm sorry about that. I know I've acted too strong at times, but I don't usually realize it. I have a hard time reading tone over the internet plus it doesn't help that I tend to be impatient a lot of the time. Honestly I don't know how I can fix that.
Ah good. I was afraid that it was coming off too strong as he's supposed to be level-headed.
Actually she never made amends with them but she's accepted that. She honestly doesn't want to go back to her world because she's happier here and would rather go with Kreutzer to her world or stay permanently. It feels more like home to her than her real one, which is part of why I'm not sure where to go with her.
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Both their journals also have HMDs which is anon-enabled, IP logging off and screened posts. Anon on here is also fine.
I've been aware that I have (or had) been too evil with my characters and I have been trying to be much nicer to them, but I can't tell if I've been done enough or not. If I'm still making the same mistakes, please let me know.
Have I been having Tails lose his temper too much? Not act mature enough? Has he been boring?
Coco I've been really struggling lately. I have been having a hard time making AC with her a lot and I honestly have no idea where to take her in development. Aside from disappeared marefriend, she's happy with her life for the most part and most of her issues have been resolved. And waiting for her next appearance in MLP would require dropping her for a few months. Do you guys have any advice on what I could do with her and improve?
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The problem is, even though you're doing a lot better when it comes to the RP itself, sometimes in OOC matters - such as on Plurk, most notably - you tend to come on... really strong. I don't know if it's a lack of contextual empathy or something like that, but you seem to find things that bug you and latch onto them like a hungry pit bull, regardless of how insignificant they are or how awkward the tone gets. I'm not sure how to fix this, or if you can spot it while it's transpiring, but it's my biggest issue.
Regarding Tails losing his temper: it's hard to say what's "right", there. He's an impulsive teenager whose canon counterpart is an impulsive supergenius kid. In addition, he has some really frustrating negative CR in his life, so it makes sense that he'd lash out regularly. If anything, I'd love to see more of Tails and Trixie, if for no other reason than I can see Tails being the sort of type who would "try to be the better pony" and try to make amends, only to have it blow up in his face again and again thanks to Trixie's ego.
Regarding Coco: Finding contentment is a weird place in a game like this, but at the same time, you can still find stuff, if you look. As an example, Flare is working to try to help others find the fulfillment she has, while at the same time fighting with the fact that she knows she's not supposed to be here, that going back home would basically be accepting that the "natural order" of things is for her to be unhappy. It's an interesting dynamic to explore, so it's not like there's nothing at all you could do WITH Coco. After all, she's in a world where her (not)parents begrudgingly accept her choices, she has her dream job, and she's got more agency than she even had in canon. She's a self-made business-mare, but maybe that feels a little hollow since it's not "home".
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Ah good. I was afraid that it was coming off too strong as he's supposed to be level-headed.
Actually she never made amends with them but she's accepted that. She honestly doesn't want to go back to her world because she's happier here and would rather go with Kreutzer to her world or stay permanently. It feels more like home to her than her real one, which is part of why I'm not sure where to go with her.