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Please tell me what I'm doing wrong. I know Derpy and Sasami tend to suffer in terms of CR and AC compared to the other three and I'm trying to fix Nozomi from her Whinezomi time, so... Yeah.
I think you have a good perception of what your biggest problems are already. I really don't know that I agree with the idea of 'Whinezomi', but tagging for Derpy and Sasami is definitely your biggest challenge right now.
Seconding what Dragon said - you've got a good grasp of where you need to patch things up, and with Derpy I'd almost suggest sitting down and really ironing out her day-to-day routine, maybe even making a log about it somewhere along the line. After all, she's a Setting Native, she's been settled in longer than most of the cast has even been here, and she doesn't seem the type to let something like a bunch of new arrivals stir her up too much.
Also, one thing I do want to applaud you for is doing a good job making Q think and sound differently from Discord. I know, given John DeLancie's charisma, that it's a very easy trap to make Q into a "Space Discord", but you've avoided that almost entirely, and I love it.
I'm going to plus one sword's suggestion on making a itinerary for Derpy's day. I used to keep one for Lyra before I horribly derailed her and I should really get back to it.
And yes, double plus for Q sounding completely different from Discord. It's magnificent.
I'm canonblind to all but Derpy, so I can't say anything about how you're playing anyone. But I would certainly like to do something with her or Sasami or any of them! Perhaps we can figure out something! What do they like to do?
That being said, I do have a few things I'd like to bring up, as gently as possible.
Perhaps it's just me, but in regards to Nozomi, I...seem to get the feeling that whenever you're upset irl about something or someone, it comes through in her, and possibly vice-versa. IC=/=OOC is a very important thing to learn, and can prevent a lot of problems, from what I've seen.
And while I don't have many problems with things ICly besides the above, some of your OOC reactions to things have caused me a lot of discomfort. I don't know if others have brought it to your attention, but you've griped about fellow players in Plurk in plain sight, and, while that's probably better than anoning at least, it's still very disconcerting. I don't know if you've gone to them in private or anything, but I don't think opening up discussion by griping in the OP about it will solve much beyond causing walls to go up. In that same vein, several responses on the HMD by you have come across, at least to me, as very much headbutting the 'be polite' rule in the face. The ones I've noticed most prominently being your response to Riki and Dragon's entries. The wording was very...heated, for lack of a better term, and while I know that can be very much a 'Your Mileage May Vary' thing, saying someone's plot is 'skeevy as hell' and other things generally doesn't come across as, well, level-headed or unbiased, and not exactly polite.
So, in regards to both of these, perhaps it's a good idea to take a step back and think about wording things better when you have a problem with someone? I don't want to see you or anyone else accidentally alienate others, after all. I genuinely don't think that's your intention, so I just wanted to bring it before you and at least make you aware that it seems to come across that way.
I think, if anything that needs to be discussed, it's my OoC problems (and it most likely connects with how Nozomi has acted recently). I'm not this bad usually. I'm usually more level-headed and try to keep out of things, but...
Yeah, I've already been talked to to the mods concerning what I said to Dragon and, while initially just realizing I screwed up, talking to Shaun and going to sleep made me realize I DO have a few problems OoC-wise.
The first one has been work. I haven't had a vacation since June of last year and that was because we had a major upheaval concerning our managers, and this is combined with snow days, having my hours cut, etc., so it's been stressful. And, I have to admit, I get badbrain when I get stressed with work, especially since I work at Wal-Mart, so I do lash out at things and I shouldn't. The vacation part I'm going to fix very soon, though.
The other is because of bad RP experiences. I've been playing Journal RPs since 2008. My first game was Digital Dive and while I met a few players there that I know here, that place colored my whole drive with RP and it shows badly. This is mostly because I've been burned there concerning plot things as the mods had the tendency to latch on to the idea that the game was their little fanfic world and everyone else was just bit players to their story.
I honestly try not to attack people over these things and it's absolutely ridiculous to say what's been going on is "triggering", but I do need to work on these things before I let the GIFT hit me at a time I really shouldn't.
I know all about first places coloring RP experiences...my first game and wank there colored mine badly, which is why I don't do anon stuff, or take much stock in it. And why I get paranoid every so often.
I really hope things calm down for you irl, that's pretty rough. Just remember to watch yourself when you're stressed. I suggest maybe playing a game that destresses you before then, or doing action-oriented tags or write fight scenes for the fun of it. You just don't want to channel some emotions too much, you know?
The best thing you can do is apologize to those you said things to in person, on PP or on AIM, try to mend bridges, and try hard to not do it again. It's not always easy, but as you work on it, I think you'll find things go a lot easier when you do.
*hugs you tight* If you ever want tips on that, or just to unwind, let me know on Plurk, alright? Hang in there, Ash. Don't hesitate to ask for help and support from us, we're your friends.
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Ash Blaze
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Sasami Masaki Jurai |
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Please tell me what I'm doing wrong. I know Derpy and Sasami tend to suffer in terms of CR and AC compared to the other three and I'm trying to fix Nozomi from her Whinezomi time, so... Yeah.
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Also, one thing I do want to applaud you for is doing a good job making Q think and sound differently from Discord. I know, given John DeLancie's charisma, that it's a very easy trap to make Q into a "Space Discord", but you've avoided that almost entirely, and I love it.
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And yes, double plus for Q sounding completely different from Discord. It's magnificent.
Re: Ash Blaze
That being said, I do have a few things I'd like to bring up, as gently as possible.
Perhaps it's just me, but in regards to Nozomi, I...seem to get the feeling that whenever you're upset irl about something or someone, it comes through in her, and possibly vice-versa. IC=/=OOC is a very important thing to learn, and can prevent a lot of problems, from what I've seen.
And while I don't have many problems with things ICly besides the above, some of your OOC reactions to things have caused me a lot of discomfort. I don't know if others have brought it to your attention, but you've griped about fellow players in Plurk in plain sight, and, while that's probably better than anoning at least, it's still very disconcerting. I don't know if you've gone to them in private or anything, but I don't think opening up discussion by griping in the OP about it will solve much beyond causing walls to go up.
In that same vein, several responses on the HMD by you have come across, at least to me, as very much headbutting the 'be polite' rule in the face. The ones I've noticed most prominently being your response to Riki and Dragon's entries. The wording was very...heated, for lack of a better term, and while I know that can be very much a 'Your Mileage May Vary' thing, saying someone's plot is 'skeevy as hell' and other things generally doesn't come across as, well, level-headed or unbiased, and not exactly polite.
So, in regards to both of these, perhaps it's a good idea to take a step back and think about wording things better when you have a problem with someone? I don't want to see you or anyone else accidentally alienate others, after all. I genuinely don't think that's your intention, so I just wanted to bring it before you and at least make you aware that it seems to come across that way.
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Yeah, I've already been talked to to the mods concerning what I said to Dragon and, while initially just realizing I screwed up, talking to Shaun and going to sleep made me realize I DO have a few problems OoC-wise.
The first one has been work. I haven't had a vacation since June of last year and that was because we had a major upheaval concerning our managers, and this is combined with snow days, having my hours cut, etc., so it's been stressful. And, I have to admit, I get badbrain when I get stressed with work, especially since I work at Wal-Mart, so I do lash out at things and I shouldn't. The vacation part I'm going to fix very soon, though.
The other is because of bad RP experiences. I've been playing Journal RPs since 2008. My first game was Digital Dive and while I met a few players there that I know here, that place colored my whole drive with RP and it shows badly. This is mostly because I've been burned there concerning plot things as the mods had the tendency to latch on to the idea that the game was their little fanfic world and everyone else was just bit players to their story.
I honestly try not to attack people over these things and it's absolutely ridiculous to say what's been going on is "triggering", but I do need to work on these things before I let the GIFT hit me at a time I really shouldn't.
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I really hope things calm down for you irl, that's pretty rough. Just remember to watch yourself when you're stressed. I suggest maybe playing a game that destresses you before then, or doing action-oriented tags or write fight scenes for the fun of it. You just don't want to channel some emotions too much, you know?
The best thing you can do is apologize to those you said things to in person, on PP or on AIM, try to mend bridges, and try hard to not do it again. It's not always easy, but as you work on it, I think you'll find things go a lot easier when you do.
*hugs you tight* If you ever want tips on that, or just to unwind, let me know on Plurk, alright? Hang in there, Ash. Don't hesitate to ask for help and support from us, we're your friends.